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BenWWarner edited dialogue in "This is your first scene." on 05/21/2012. BenWWarner made 61 other changes.
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BOB
It's done, I gave the money back, our business is done.
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Bob moves to the back of the elevator, grabs his bag of cash and climbs onto the hand rails. He pushes up and pops loose a piece of the ceiling and starts to pull himself up. Bob climbs his way up the elevator cables, his hands are getting cut and he struggles to climb but slowly he makes progress. His destination is only a few floors higher.
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Ethan
Bob, is it?
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Ethan shoots Bob a knowing look, then glances down at the duffel bag by Bob's feet. Bob notices this and scoots the bag closer to him.
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Ethan fires a single shot as the elevator doors close and he heads back upstairs, he glances at his watch which reads 12:01.
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Ethan
Happy new year Bob.
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Bob slowly turns around and is face to face with Ethan's pistol again.
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BOB
Yeah?
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Ethan
Oh, Bob, one last thing.
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Ethan gives Bob a devious smile as the elevator starts taking them to the ground floor. When they get to the bottom Bob gives out a sigh of relief and takes his first step out of the elevator.
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Ethan
Seems so Bob.
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BOB
It's done, I gave the money back our business is done.
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Ethan
Welcome back Bob.
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Bob cracks his first smile of the night knowing that his debt has finally been repaid. He heads back to the elevator a new man.
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BOB
Take this to Salvator. Tell him its over, tell him I'm out.
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Ethan
Try it again and it you won't even make it to midnight. If I were you I'd use that energy to find a way to get that money to Salvator.
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BOB
Take this to Salvator
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Just as Bob reaches the final floor, the elevator starts moving upwards, Bob can't believe his bad luck.
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Ethan
(yelling from the elevator)
Sorry Bob, but your time is just about up!
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Ethan
(yelling from the elevator)
Sorry Bob, but your time is just about up
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Bob moves to the back of the elevator, grabs his bag of cash and climbs onto the hand rails. He pushes up and pops loose a piece of the ceiling and starts to climb up it. Bob begins to climb his way up the elevator cables, his hands are getting cut and he struggles to climb but slowly he makes progress. His destination is only a few floors higher.
BenWWarner added an action in "This is your first scene." on 05/21/2012 [view]
Bob moves to the back of the elevator and climbs onto the hand rails. He pushes up and pops loose a piece of the ceiling and starts to climb up it.
BenWWarner added dialogue in "This is your first scene." on 05/21/2012 [view]
Ethan
You have 5 muinutes left Bob, and it looks like the only way out is going up.
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BOB
Fuck! I can't die in this fucking elevator!
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Bob attempts to pull open the elevator doors, but when he gets them open he sees that they are stuck between two floors with no way out.
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BOB
Maybe if I can just get this door open...
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Bob collects himself off the floor and tries to regain his composure. Ethan smiles and seems amused with Bob.
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BOB
Ok, ok, don't shoot me. I'm sorry I shouldn't have tried that.
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Ethan
Try it again and it you won't even make it to midnight. If I were you I'd use that energy to find a way to get that money to Salvador.
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In a moment of sheer panic and rage Bob lunges at Ethan. Ethan easily sidesteps him and slams his face against a hand rail. By the time Bob hits the floor Ethan has a large handgun pointed at his face.
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Ethan
Oh, I do understand, and believe me, I do feel for you, but I've got a job to do as well. You have 10 minutes Bob, with any luck the elevator will get going again and we can both go upstairs and enjoy the party. But at midnight I'm putting a bullet in your brain, that's just the way its got to be.
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BOB
I know but I'm so close he'll understand if I'm a couple minutes late. Please man, you've got to understand!
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Ethan
Salvator gave you till midnight Bob. You've had months to get him his money.
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BOB
You... You're here to kill me aren't you!
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Bob checks his watch again, the time reads 11:50.
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Ethan
Lucky guess I suppose.
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Ethan
Well this is a hell of a coincidence, you see I'm here to kill you.
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BOB
How'd you know that?
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Ethan
Bob is it?
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Ethan shoots Bob a knowing look, then glances down at the duffel bag by Bob's feet.
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BOB
Yeah me too, but if this fucking elevator doesn't get me up there by midnight I don't know how much work I'll be getting in this town anymore.
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Ethan
You could say that, but really I tend to work more freelance jobs.
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BOB
Oh yeah? You work for Salvador upstairs?
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Bob checks his watch and looks at Ethan nervously.
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BOB
I'm fine but I'm in a big hurry and we're going nowhere fast.
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Bob looks and sounds nervous, his voice cracks as he speaks and he's starting to sweat profusely. Ethan looks calm and collected. The sounds of a big party a few floors above vibrate the elevator cables.
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Ethan
Yeah I'm running a little late too, I'm supposed to be working upstairs at the big party.
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Bob looks and sounds nervous, his voice cracks as he speaks and he's starting to sweat profusely. Ethan looks calm and collected.
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Two men walk into an elevator on New Year's Eve, to their dismay the elevator stops halfway between two floors no where near their destination. One, man Ethan is dressed sharply in a business suit. The other, BOB, looks like he just rolled out of bed, wearing sweats and a t shirt, he carries with him a large duffel bag.
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BOB
I'm fine but I'm in a big hurry and were going nowhere fast.
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