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JeffLarson added a blog entry. on 02/06/2009. JeffLarson made 45 other changes.
JeffLarson added a blog entry. on 02/06/2009
In the forum, JeffLarson created a new post, "Things Shaping Up" on 02/06/2009 [read]
JeffLarson added an action in "This is your first scene." on 02/06/2009 [view]
Unseen by either Jeff or Mavi, HEATHER shuffles out from behind the restaurant. She see's Jeff and Mavi and stumbles behind a near car, peeking her head back over the roof in an over-the-top comedic way. She watches and listens.
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JEFF and MAVI exit the diner and head toward Jeff's sedan. Their footsteps softly pierce the night's stillness. Crickets chirp over the classic country tune that bleeds through the thin walls and windows of the diner. Jeff leads ahead. Mavi follows a few strides behind.
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JEFF
You know, I don't really need any help with the shirt. Honest.
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JEFF and MAVI exit the diner and head toward Jeff's sedan. The night is still. Crickets chirp over the classic country tune that bleeds through the thin walls and windows of the diner.
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EXT. JAKE AND MARY'SMOMENTS LATER
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Jeff raises an eyebrow.
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MAVI
(slyly)
You need any help with that?
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JEFF
Yeah, you're right. Jeez! I better go get a new shirt on.
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Jeff gives up his questioning for the time.
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JAKE
And you know, that Santa sleigh up there
(points at the roof)
doesn't mean it's Christmas time either! HAHAHA!
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JAKE finally scurries away, cackling to himself.
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JAKE goes off to help other customer, realizes he forgot to mention something, then turns back toward JEFF.
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JAKE
And you know, that Santa sleigh up there
(points at the roof)
doesn't mean it's Christmas either! HAHAHA!
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JAKE goes off to help other customer, then turns back toward Jeff.
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The little diner looks inviting with its dingy yellow light pouring out of the windows and a model Christmas display of Santa and his sleigh over the door, even though it's definitely no where near the Holiday Season. His car comes to a stop in front of a parking spot that also has a hitching rail. Jeff gives it an amused look as he locks his car and approaches the entrance.
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EXT. JAKE AND MARY'SCONTINUOUS
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The windows are rolled down. Jeff is clearly enjoying the drive and the cool night air. His shirtsleeves are rolled up past his elbow and his tie is loosened. NPR's late night BBC coverage is on the radio at a sensible volume. The road is a mostly deserted rural highway, but ahead we see the lights of a small town. Jeff takes the opportunity to exit the highway. He's looking for a truck stop or convenience store but none appear so he settles on a neon lit sign which flashes "Jake and Mary's" over and over.
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MAVI
I don't know who's more a sight, her with all that carrying-on or you with your pie shirt.
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This subject clearly makes Mavi uncomfortable. She hasn't yet spilled all the beans, so she changes the subject.
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MAVI
She's got issues, you see. She always complains that she's a, a virgin. I, I don't know why she complains about it... or why nobody's ever taken it from her. Probably because she drinks so much.
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Jeff looks back up.
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MAVI
(suddenly, hastily)
I mean, she's kinda different. She... She's...
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The answer doesn't really satisfy Jeff's curiosity, but he restrains himself from prying. His gaze turns downward as he takes another napkin to his soiled shirt.
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MAVI
(dismissively)
That's just Heather. She's the town drunkard. Always been that way.
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MAVI
That's just Heather. She's the town drunkard. Always been that way.
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Mavi, wavers, unsure if she should tell him the whole story. She decides it's best to let it be.
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MAVI
Look, it wouldn't make sense to someone who's just passing through.
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Mavi peers at him as at a child. Her look conveys amazement; amazement at his ignorance and equal parts jealousy of the bliss of not knowing.
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MAVI
(interrupts Jeff)
I was just kidding...
(pause)
Ah!... You go...
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HEATHER walks towards the door with her beer in hand. She has a swagger to her that is almost sexy, certainly deranged. Before she exists she turns around spreads her arms crucifixion-style and challanges the bar. The patrons are silent. She staggars sets her beer down, then, as though she forgot the previous grand gesture, extends her arms again to and gives the restaurant a righteous "double birdy". The camera does flash cuts to one half of the restaurant then back to HEATHER, the other half then back to HEATHER's middle fingers. The camera quick cuts to JEFF, then HEATHER, she identifies him as "an outsider" and eyes him suspiciously. She double lunges at JEFF.
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JEFF
What was that all about? What's a maypole?
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Another brief pause, Jeff ends up going ahead afterall.
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MAVI, has been watching this with equal parts affection and repulsion
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INT. JAKE AND MARY'SCONTINUOUS
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MAVI
Look, I better get going. I'm late.
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Another brief pause and Mavi goes ahead.
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JEFF
(interrupts Mavi)
Where did you...
(pause)
Sorry... I, uh... you first.
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MAVI
(interrupts Jeff)
So you said...
(pause)
Ah!... You go...
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JEFF
(interupts Mavi)
Where did you...
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MAVI
(interupts Jeff)
So you said...
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They both sit, still thinking about the commotion a few moments earlier. After a moment, they both try and speak at the same time, just to break the silence.
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JEFF
Ah... No, no I don't.
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MAVI
Do you know her?
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