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This is your first scene. Last edited by ebony533, on 11/03/2012. 0 comments. More scene info.

int. Laurel's house - Laurel's bedroom - Night

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It's a cold night and the sky is clear. LAUREL,a very confident sixteen year old, is sitting on her bed in her pajamas writing a paper on her laptop. Her friend JENNY, a bit awkward and also sixteen, is on the floor writing the same paper on her own laptop. Laurel has music playing on her docked ipod to get help them focus.

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Laurel

This paper totally blows. I don't have any real phobia. I've litterally been sitting here for the past half and hour staring at a blank document.

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jENNY

Just make something up .

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Jenny clearly isn't having a problem with the assignment. Laurel spots her friend completely engrossed with what's on her computer screen and gets curious.

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Laurel

What are you writing then?

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jENNY

Nothing. I'm just putting a bunch of drabble on here.

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Laurel

You look a hell of a lot interested in that drabble. Let me see.

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Laurel crawls off of her bed and reaches for the laptop but Jenny closes before she can grab it.

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Jenny

No it's kind of private.

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Laurel

I thought it was just drabble.

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jENNY

It is. It's private drabble.

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Laurel

Whatever, I'm hungry. Let's go raid the fridge.

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Int. Kitchen- Night

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Laurel walks into the kitchen and heads for the fridge. Jenny is standing in against the wall with a darker expression on her face.

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Laurel

We don't really have anything. Strawberry cheesecake ice cream okay?

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jENNY

Sure. How long are your parents gonna be gone?

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Laurel

They'll be back from their trip tomorrow. C'mon let's get back to work

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Laurel grabbed the tub of ice cream and two spoons from the cabinet.

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int Laure's house- bedroom- night

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The girls head back up to Laurel's room and work on their papers.It's quiet except for the upbeat pop song coming from Laurel's speakers.

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Laurel (CONT'D)

So what are you over there writing about anyway?

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jENNY

Nothing, I'm just writing whatever.

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Laurel

C'mon Jen. What's your biggest fear?

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Jenny looks a bit uncomfortable with all the attention. She's relieved when the alarm on her phone goes off letting her know she should head home.

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jENNY

I gotta go. I've got a curfew.

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Jenny starts packing her stuff. Laurel's demeanor changes, it's obvious she's not happy abou

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Int. living room- night

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Jenny comes down the stairs, bag in hand. Laurel is right behind her.

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Laurel

C'mon just call your parents and tell them that you're gonna eat here. We can order pizza and pig out.

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jENNY

I'm sorry, I really can't.

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Jenny opens the door but Laurel slams it back closed. Laurel stands between Jenny and the door. Something is completely different about her. The grin she had on her face lets us know she's definately not an innocent sixteen year old girl.

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jENNY (CONT'D)

Laurel?

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Laurel

I'd say I'm sorry about this but... I'm not.

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Laurel grabs Jenny by the throat and pushed her toward the stairs causing the both of them to fall. Jenny pushes Laurel away from her and runs up the stairs. Laurel is right behind her and reaches out grabbing her ankle.Jenny falls again and kicks backwards hitting Laurel in the stomach.

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When she is free of Laurel, Jenny takes the stairs two at a time and runs into the closest door. Once she's inside Jenny realizes that she chose the wrong door.

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int. closet- night

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jENNY

Holy shi...

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Laurel

Jenny, Jenny, Jenny. Thanks for making this easy.

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Laurel taps on the door with a hunting knife(gotten from her dad's collection). Jenny looks around the room(it's more like a closet) frantically. It's small with nothing but a tarp covering the floor, there's not even a window. Jenny reaches for the doorknob, preparing to fight her way out but only grabs air. When she looks she realizes that there is no doorknob.

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Jenny digs into her pockets for her phone and starts dialing but her phone beeps and shuts off.

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jENNY

Why are you doing this?

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Laurel

I don't really know. It's something I started doing a couple years ago. What can I say? It's fun. But that's enough of that, don't you think?

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Laurel pushes the door open causing Jenny to fly backward. Laurel walks in and slams the door behind her. Jenny moves to the back of the room as she stares at the knife in Laurel's hands.

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Laurel (CONT'D)

Let's play.

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Jenny sees the key tied on a string around Laurel's neck. She clenches her jaw and rams into Laurel causing both of them to fall on the floor. As she tries to grab the key Laurel shoves the knife into Jenny's abdomen. Laurel pushes Jenny from on top of her and stands up.

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Laurel starts laughing as she stares at Jenny bleeding all over the tarp. Jenny doesn't give up, she starts crawling for the door desperate to get away from Laurel. This just adds to Laurel's amusement causing her to laugh louder.

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When Jenny gets to the door Laurel walks over to her. She grabbs Jenny's ankle and drags her back to the middle of the small room and turns her to her back. Jenny tries frighting back but it doesn't faze Laurel as she slowly slides the knife into Jenny's chest.

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Jenny starts crying and gasping as blood fills her lungs. Laurel sits next to Jenny, watching her bleed out on the tarp. The house phone starts ringing.

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Laurel gets up, unlocks the door, and goes and grabs the cordless phone from her room. She picks the phone up as she walks back to the closet and stares at Jenny.

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Laurel (CONT'D)

Hey mom...Yeah everything's fine...No she left already...Nothing I'm just watching a movie.

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Jenny uses her last bit of strength to turn over and start crawling towards the door. She's able to get to the doorway when kneels down next to her.

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Laurel (CONT'D)

I love you too, bye.

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Laurel hangs up the phone and tosses it in the hall. She grabs Jenny's hair and tilts her head back. Laurel just looks at Jenny as she cries and struggles to breathe until Jenny stops fighting. She gasps a couple times before her body goes limp and her eyes glaze over.

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Laurel lets go of Jenny's hair letting her head drop to the floor with a thump and walks away.

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int. bedroom- night

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Laurel sits on her bed and grabs her laptop to finish her paper.

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Fade out:

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