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This is your first scene. Last edited by notsogoodman, on 11/10/2014. 0 comments. More scene info.

ext. house - night

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The moon is large in the frame with an object from the porch in a corner of the shot. It is a WAXING GIBBOUS MOON. The shot is fixed and all dialogue will be V.O. of the wife on the phone with her husband and vice-versa.

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Throughout the dialogue, as one shot cuts to the other, so does the character whose voice will be coming through the phone's receiver. Shots from the home will represent the wife and shots from the woods will be the husbands.

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woman

Are you looking?

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man

Ya I can see it.

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Woman

What type is it tonight?

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man

Still a waxing gibbous Sweets, and it'll be like that for at least 4 more days.

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Woman

Then what?

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man

A full moon.

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Woman

Oh, yes! It'll be lovely.

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man

Yes it will be.

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woman

And you are lovely.

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EXT. WOODS - NIGHT (CONT'D)

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CUT: Second shot of the MOON with branches obscuring it at times. The moon is equally as dominating in frame. It's from a different location far away. The husband is also entirely V.O. with his wife on the phone.

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Man

And you, only ever more.

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woman

Have you made it far today?

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MAn

Yes, today was a big day. I am getting close Sweets, it'll all be over soon.

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woman

Good.

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man

Do you remember where the Procellarum is?

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EXT. HOUSE - NIGHT (CONT'D)

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WOMAN

Ya I see it! I love how the shadow makes it seem to lead into space.

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Man

It does huh? It just doesn't end.

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woman

Do you ever think there will be real water in those oceans and green on the land?

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man

No I don't think so Sweets.

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woman

I wish it were. I would live up there and we could stare at each other.

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EXT. WOODS - NIGHT (CONT'D)

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man

But i can see you right now! There, in the bright reflection. I can see your beautiful brown hair and my favorite mole.

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woman

(She covers her face)It's a stupid mole!

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man

I can even see that hot ass I love so much.

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woman

Hey! I'm a lady, you cant talk to me like that.

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Man

But I do! It's so hot.

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woman

Does it help that I'm touching it?

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man

no.

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woman

I'm doing that thing you do.

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Man

oh gawd please help me.

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woman

(loud smack and a sigh)It's just not the same

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EXT. HOUSE - NIGHT (CONT'D)

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man

Well at least I've still got something.

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woman

Just come back.

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man

I cant.

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woman

You can.

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man

I cant. Please.

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woman

When will I hear from you again?

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man

Not for a week or so I'm afraid Sweets.

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woman

A week? Why?

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EXT. WOODS - NIGHT (CONT'D)

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man

I'm going to a place where I will not be able to reach you.

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woman

A week? The last one was too hard, I worry about you.

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Man

I know, it was hard for me too. but you will hear from me again. If I am lucky there will be an old connection somewhere.

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EXT. HOUSE - NIGHT (CONT'D)

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woman

There never is and I worry still.

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Man

Well maybe this time there will be.

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woman

And our full moon?

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Man

I'm afraid I'm going to miss it.

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Holding this shot for a few beats in silence.

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FADE OUT

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EXT. HOUSE - NIGHT

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Screen cuts to a shot of a FULL MOON and the phone rings. The wife's shot is from another part of the house, fixed and similar to the last scene.

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woman

Baby is that you?

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man

We got lucky darling.

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woman

Oh, I cant believe it! Hold on I'll run outside. Are you looking?

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EXT. WOODS - NIGHT

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There are tons of pine trees covering most of the sky and the moon is only visible through tiny slits in the branches.

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man

Yes, but there are many trees and I cant see it. Will you describe it to me?

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woman

It's beautiful tonight.

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EXT. HOUSE - NIGHT

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Woman (cont'd)

It's big and bright and I can even see my shadow.

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man

And what eles?

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woman

If you look closely there is a ring of light just surrounding it. Oh, its an incredible moon tonight love, I wish you could see it.

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Man

But I can. You have put it in my mind. As I see you I see the moon, and it is just as real.

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woman

Describe it to me.

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EXT. LAWN - FLASHBACK - NIGHT

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The woman sits in the foreground in the dark with a full moon in the distance behind her. She is out of focus and is staring back at the man's P.O.V. from his memory.

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man

She is magnificent. Luminous and lovely. She's rests there with her feet out, eating an apple or something and she is happy.

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woman

The moon!

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Man

Oh, right. Well it is also magnificent.

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The shot pushes in on the moon, closer and closer until it dominates the frame.

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man (cont'd)

It seems larger than the sun and just as bright. It is so clear you can see the south pole.

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woman

I can see it too! Look at how perfect it is.

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man

Ya.

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EXT. HOUSE - NIGHT

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WOMAN

How much longer do you have?

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man

Not long. This is a very old line. I nearly electrocuted myself trying to arrange it.

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woman

Any signs of them yet?

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man

There are signs but none of them do much good. They're in some sort of hurry.

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woman

Be careful love, you are alone out there.

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EXT. WOODS - NIGHT

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man

But there is you and the moon and with that I don't feel so lonely.

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HOLD

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FADE OUT

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INT. HOUSE - NIGHT

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Shot is of a WAXING MOON through a WINDOW. The wife picks up the phone with her husband on the line.

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man (CONT'D)

Hey Sweets.

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woman

Where have you been?

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man

Moving, fast - covering a lot of ground. There hasn't been any time to set up communication.

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woman

I've been pulling my hair out worrying about you. You cant do this to me.

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MAN

I'm sorry, It's good to hear you though.

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woman

Have you found them?

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EXT. WOODS - NIGHT

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From the husbands POV the WAXING MOON is visible through a mess of tree branches.

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man

Yes. I'm just waiting now.

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woman

Are you safe?

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man

Course I am.

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woman

No you're not.

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man

It is dangerous, but I'm safe.

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woman

I don't know how much more I can take of this.

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man

Just hold on for me Sweets, hold on cause I need you.

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woman

I love you.

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man

I love you too.

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woman

Don't you dare leave me alone out here.

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man

Can you see the moon? Are you looking?

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INT. HOUSE - NIGHT

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WOMAN

There is nothing special about the moon tonight.

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man

It's a waxing-

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woman

I don't care if it's waxing or waning, full or empty. When I look all I see is you running farther and farther away from me.

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man

I see you.

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woman

But it's not me and it's not you.

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man

It's all I've got.

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Beat.

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woman

How will you take them?

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man

I cant say, it's unsafe.

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woman

Do they know you're there?

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man

Yes.

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woman

Baby, remember the station? What if they all come for you?

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EXT. WOODS - NIGHT

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man

No one is coming for me Sweets, they are running pretty convincingly.

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woman

Its already been a month longer than you said. Just call in someone else.

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man

I can't call and there's no one to call. If I leave they'll get away.

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woman

Then let them get away! They will run for the rest of their lives! You've already chased them all they way up the coast just call in Ron or Steve or...

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man

They will get away. I cant.

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woman

Give up for me. Just give it all up and come back to me.

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man

This ends with me! What has happened cannot go unforgiven. Sweets, no one will forget if I leave now.

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woman

I'll forget, I'll make them forget. Your life isn't worth some mob justice kilometers away.

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man

Enough. It's my justice as well. And yours, whether you know it or not. I will cut these men down in their sleep and the world will be better for it.

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woman

Then do it and be careful. If I have to sit through another full moon justice or not, truth or not, I wont wait for your coms anymore.

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man

I'll be keeping you warm by then, Sweets.

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EXT. WOODS - DUSK

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The shot becomes live action, handheld and following a LAWMAN and his dog running through the woods. He wears a state sheriffs outfit, dark blue jacket with the glint of a badge pinned on his heaving chest.

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He chases a CRIMINAL; wearing a dark jacket and a muddy, disheveled visage he sprints away from his predator.

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The criminal trips over a log and hits the mud hard. The lawman commands his dog to halt and the dog stops at the foot of the man. Before the criminal can get up he is tackled by the lawman and captured in agony. There is a full moon in the background.

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The lawman grunts with a deep unfamiliar voice.

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Lawman

You fucking traitor, but I've got you now.

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INT. HOUSE - BEDROOM - DUSK

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A woman's silhouette watches the full moon through a window. She puts down a phone.

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woman

You said... you said, not another. Where are you?

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She puts her head in her hand is fighting tears.

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woman (cont'd)

Fuck! I cant.

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EXT. WOODS - NIGHT.

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The criminal is in a wagon being carted off on his back down some dirt road. It's squeaky and bumpy. From the criminal's POV we see the moon as it dances in between the bars in front of his eyes. He lays there in defeat and talks to the moon and his wife, somewhere far away.

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CRIMINAL

Hey Sweets. It's our moon tonight. You look gorgeous. I can see your reflection.

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INT. HOUSE - BEDROOM - NIGHT

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A woman sits with he knees tucked against her in a wooden chair. Her hair covers her face and it is dark. The criminal's voice carries on in VO.

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The shot pushes into her lament on the chair.

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criminal (v.o.)(Cont'd)

You're sitting in front of the TV with a glass of wine laughing, cheeks rosy red. My mole vanishing into your dimples.

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EXT. WOODS - WAGON - NIGHT

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CRIMINAL (CONT'D)

I wish I could be there with you right now Sweets. I wish we could claim the moon again.

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HOLD

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HARD TO BLACK

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END CREDITS

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