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notsogoodman edited dialogue in "This is your first scene." on 11/14/2014. notsogoodman made 97 other changes.
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woman
Be careful love, you are alone out there.
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woman
Describe it to me.
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woman
If you look closely there is a ring of light just surrounding it. Oh, its an incredible moon tonight love, I wish you could see it.
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man
no.
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woman
Do you ever think there will be real water in those oceans and green on the land?
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Throughout the dialogue, as one shot cuts to the other, so does the character whose voice will be coming through the phone's receiver. Shots from the home will represent the wife and shots from the woods will be the husbands.
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The moon is large in the frame with an object from the porch in a corner of the shot. It is a WAXING GIBBOUS MOON. The shot is fixed and all dialogue will be V.O. of the wife on the phone with her husband or vice-versa.
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END CREDITS
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The criminal is in a wagon being carted off on his back down some dirt road. It's squeaky and bumpy. From the criminal's POV we see the moon as it dances in between the bars in front of his eyes. He lays there in defeat and talks to the moon and his wife, somewhere far away.
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FADE OUT
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HOLD
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CRIMINAL (CONT'D)
I wish I could be there with you right now Sweets. I wish we could claim the moon again.
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EXT. WOODS - WAGON - NIGHT
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criminal (v.o.)(Cont'd)
You're sitting in front of the TV with a glass of wine laughing, cheeks rosy red. My mole vanishing into your dimples.
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The shot pushes into her lament on the chair.
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The shot pushes into her lament on the chair.
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criminal (v.o.)(Cont'd)
You're sitting in front of the TV with a glass of wine laughing, cheeks rosy red.
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A woman sits with he knees tucked against her in a wooden chair. Her hair covers her face and it is dark. The criminal's voice carries on in VO.
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INT. HOUSE - NIGHT
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INT. HOUSE - NIGHT
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INT. HOUSE - BEDROOM - DUSK
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INT. HOUSE - BEDROOM - NIGHT
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CRIMINAL
Hey Sweets. It's our moon tonight, you look gorgeous. I can see your reflection.
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The criminal is in a wagon being carted off on his back down some dirt road. From the criminal's POV we see the moon as it dances in between the bars in front of his eyes. He lays there in defeat and talks to the moon and his wife, somewhere far away.
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EXT. WOODS - NIGHT.
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woman (cont'd)
Fuck! I cant, I cant.
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She puts her head in her hand is fighting tears.
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woman
I've lost track of how many this is. I don't want to remember.
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A woman's silhouette watches the full moon through a window. She puts down a phone
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EXT. HOUSE - BEDROOM - DUSK
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The criminal trips over a log and hits the mud hard. The lawman commands his dog to halt and the dog stops at the foot of the man. Before the criminal can get up he is tackled by the lawmen and captured in agony. There is a full moon in the background.
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He chases a CRIMINAL; wearing a dark jacket and a muddy, disheveled visage he sprints away from his predator.
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He chases a CRIMINAL; wearing a dark jacket and disheveled he sprints away from his predator.
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The shot becomes live action, handheld and following a LAWMAN and his dog running through the woods. He wears a state sheriffs outfit, dark blue jacket with the glint of a badge pinned on his heaving chest.
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He chases
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The shot becomes live action, handheld and following a man and his dog running through the woods. He wears a state lawman's outfit, dark blue jacket with the glint of a badge pinned on his heaving chest.
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EXT. WOODS - DUSK
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man
I'll be keeping you warm by then.
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woman
Then do it and be careful. If I have to sit through another full moon justice or not, truth or not, I wont wait for your coms anymore.
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man
Enough. It's my justice as well. And yours, whether you know it or not. I will cut these men down in their sleep and the world will be better for it.
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woman
Then do it and be careful. If I have to sit through another full moon..
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man
It's my justice and they'll find it in the ground.
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woman
I'll forget, I'll make them forget. Your life isn't worth some mob justice kilometers away.
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woman
I'll forget, I'll make them forget. Your life isn't worth some mob justice.
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man
This ends with me. What has happened cannot go unforgiven. Sweets, no one will forget if I leave now.
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man
I can't call and there's no one to call. If I leave they'll get away.
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MAN
I'm sorry, It's good to hear you though.
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man
I have to end it now. What has happened cannot go unforgiven. Sweets, no one will forget if I leave now.
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woman
Give up for me. Just give it all up and come back to me.
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woman
Then let them get away! They will run for the rest of their lives! You've already chased them all they way up the coast just call in Ron or Steve or...
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