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This is your first scene. Last edited by sharkpoint, on 02/02/2014. 0 comments. More scene info.

EVENING INterior--neighborhood Pizza shop.

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We open on our main character (ALAN) sitting alone over a half eaten pizza. He's seemingly dejected. His cellphone rings.

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AlAN

Hello?.. (Upbeat) Hey Richie, what's up?

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richie (on the phone)

Hey what's shakin' cowboy? You in town?

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alan

Yeah. I'm at Louie's downing some slices. Great party last night. Really sweet. You and Sherry are tops

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richie (on the PHone)

Yeah thanks. Really happy you made it over. Hey we're just finishing packing up. We're out tomorrow. Back to Chicago.

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AlAN

Yeah I know. Really gonna miss ya.

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richie (on the PHone)

Me too. Come on by. There's someone I want you to meet.

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alan

I love ya Richie. I'm just not sure now's the right time.

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Richie (on the phone)

Alan. Just come on by. I promise you it will be worth it.

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alan

I don't know man. I just ate. Not feeling it ya know.

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Richie (on the PHone)

Bullshit. This will be worth it. Get your ass over here.

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alan

C'mon Richie. Just give it a rest. It's not the time.

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richie (on the PHone)

Listen to me shithead. I'm telling you this is something you don't want to miss.

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alan

(sarcastic)Really. . And where is this happening about to occur?

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richie(on the phone)

I'm at Sherry's house in Honeybrook. C'mon over.

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alan

Honeybrook? Where the fuck is Honeybrook?

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richie (on the phone)

Dude. It's about 20 minutes away. 454 Brentwood Place. Nav it. You'll find it.

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alan

I don't know Richie.

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richie (on the phone)

Listen to me you schnook. I'm leaving tomorrow. What do have to lose. We'll see each other one last time and you might find something worth visiting. So get rolling cowboy. I'll see you in a half. Later.

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Richie clicks off leaving Alan holding the phone to his ear with a wondering look on his face. Figuring he's got nothing left to lose, Tony steps over to the counter and pays for his food and leaves.

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cut to

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evening Interior SUV Vehicle

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We find Alan trying to load his navigation system with the address. It doesn't seem to recognize the address.

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alan (to himself)

Brentwood....Brentwood. Is that two words? Damn, Brentwood, Calif? What? Oh-jeez

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Alan get the address loaded and the nav tells him its 22 minutes away.

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cut to

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Alan takes off on his mission to Honeybrook. The ride takes him through some very dicey neighborhoods. We will track the action picking up real people along the way. Street thugs, streetwalkers, kids etc. The ride is a long and Tony through his body language and expressions is showing real doubt about the mission.

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cut to

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Alan arrives at the Honeybrook address and parks in front of the house.

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cut to

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night exterior front porch of middle class house

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Alan rings front door bell. Waiting a beat, Richie comes to the door.

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richie

Alan!

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Embracing warmly

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ALan

Richie my brother!

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richie

You made it. Come on in. I'll go get Sherry.

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cut to

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Night interior house living room

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Richie leads Alan into the house. Richie steps away and Alan enters the living room where there are 5 woman seated. Three together on a couch and two in club chairs across the room. Unaware of which one is the intended target, Tony begins a dialogue in the room and in his head simultaneously.

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Alan steps up to the first woman. Reaches out his hand

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Alan

Hello. How do you do? I'm Alan

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alan (Inside his HEAD)

Oh God, hands like a linebacker. I hope not.

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To the second woman. Clearly a hottie

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alan

And hello to you!

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alan (inside his head)

Yes. Yes. Yes. Be you. Be you. Be you. If there's any justice in the world, BE YOU

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To the third woman

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alan

Hi.

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alan(inside his head)

OK. You're cute. But you're not number 2, number 2, number 2.

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Alan makes his way around to the other two woman and then steps to the end of the room and smiles. The conversation between the women picks up and he observes a bit detached.

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Richie comes back into the room with Sherry.

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Sherry

Alan!

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alan

Hello love! (Embracing) Are you all set for Chicago?

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sherry

Oh we are gonna so miss you guys!

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richie

Hey Alan, I've got something I want to show you in the basement.

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alan

Huh?

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Picking up on Richie's diversion to the basement

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Alan (CONT'D)

Oh yeah. What do ya got?

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cut to

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night interior basement

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Alan and Richie head down the stairs into a finished basement.

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alan

So which one is it?

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richie

Ha. Ha. Now all of sudden you're interested

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Handing Alan a beer.

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alan

Well maybe. Which one?

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richie

Well.....

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alan

Cut the shit Richie.

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richie

OK. OK. She's was the one on the couch. In the middle.

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Alan breaks out in a huge smile and shoots out a small fist pump. Chugs some of the beer.

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alan

Yes! Really? Yes!

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richie

Yeah. She's a real sweetheart.

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tony

So you told her all about me. You showed her my picture? She was all cool with meeting me?

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Richie takes a swig of his beer, feeling a bit uncomfortable

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richie

Ah no. Not exactly

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alan

Ah no. Not exactly. What the fuck does that mean?

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richie

Well she had no idea you were coming over. She doesn't know anything about you. But her name is Kari and she's a doll.

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alan

What!! You dragged my ass all the way down here shaking off pimps and hookers and you didn't set anything up? What's the matter with you?

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richie

Relax. Relax. Listen, I know her and I know you. I didn't need to set anything up. I know you guys are meant for each other. Trust me. Just go up there and be yourself.

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alan

I can't believe you! Why did you do this? You are a sick sonovabitch!

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richie

Would you just relax! It's going to be great. Trust me. You'll see. C'mon let's go.

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Richie starts back of the stairs leaving Alan in the basement. Alan chugs the rest of his beer and takes a moment to collect himself. He then tosses his empty beer aside and heads back upstairs.

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Alan figuring he's come this far so he decides he'll turn on the charm and see what happens with Kari. His advances seem to be working on Numbers 1 and 3, but Kari seems disinterested. Alan returns to the living and is standing off to the side.

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number 1

Haven't I seen you on TV?

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Alan

Yeah, every now and then. I do some stand-up and emceeing around town

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number 3

I told you so! He's the guy that did that did the parade!

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Number 1

Parade? What parade?

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Kari

(sarcastically) Gay pride?!

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alan

Oh ho, we have a comedienne in our midst. Yes I host the parade on TV. It was for the Breast Cancer Walk-a-Thon.

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number 1

Well I think that's great. Didn't you also sing with The Secret Kids?

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We focus on Kari who looks about as interested in the conversation as someone getting life insurance.

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alan (in his head)

This is great. They're a running catalogue of my life. But what's with this Kari?

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alan

I did. They invited me on stage at their last show. It went viral.

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richie

Oh yeah, I saw that! I meant to ask you how Billy has been doing since they got crazy hot.

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alan

He's stretched man. Really focused but all over the map. Long way from Dobbs on Sunday nites.

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richie

No shit. Nice to see one of our boys make it hot.

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Alan trying to move the conversation off himself moves to the other side of the room and grabs another beer.

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alan

Anyone need a drink?

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Number 1

I'm okay. I have to be going in a couple minutes.

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alan (In his head)

Yeah, me too-this is painful

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alan

Anyone? Sherry, Richie?

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kari

Is there any Jamison?

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alan

Ah....yeah there is. Do you want?

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kari

Yes I'd like a shot. And make one for yourself.

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alan

(hesitant)Ah....okay

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richie

You might as well kill it, we're not taking the bar to Chicago.

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Alan pours the two shots and brings them over to Kari who is still seated on the couch. They clink glasses and down the shots. Kari smiles and hands her empty glass back to Alan., but then looks away and starts talking to Number 3.

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kari

Thank you, Alan.

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Kari turns away and begins chatting with Number 1.

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kari (CONT'D)

So where are you going?

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alan (in his head)

OK. That's it. I'm leaving. This is just too icy.

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number 1

Oh I've got a tryout tomorrow morning. Up early and on the road. As a matter of fact I really have to get going.

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Number 1 gets up off the couch and begins to gather her coat.

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Alan

Yeah, I think I'm going to head out too.

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kari

No Alan. Why don't you sit down right here.

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Kari patting the seat next to her on the couch. Alan steps past Number 1 and sits next to Kari.

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Alan throws a quizzical look Richie's way. Richie returns the look with a knowing smile.

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kari (CONT'D)

So tell me Alan, what do you do beside show up on TV every now and then.

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Alan

Well, I have a stand up routine and I'm a multi-millionaire software developer. I also wrestle alligators and fly a skywriting airplane.

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kari

Fascinating. You know I was a wing-walker in the circus, you should take me for a ride sometime.

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Both look at each other and crack a big smile. Conversation moves on and through a montage of dissolves we see all the characters in the living room having a good time. Kari is engaging but we see from Alan's body language that he's unsure of his standing

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After a passage of time, we return to Alan and Kari on the couch.

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alan

Richie, I really have to be going.

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richie

Alright man. Really gonna miss ya.

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Alan and Richie get up to embrace.

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kari

Alan? Are you headed back to the city?

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Alan

Yeah. Do you need a ride?

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Kari

That would be great!

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Kari quickly picks up her things and starts toward the door.

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kari (CONT'D)

Bye guys. Have a safe trip to Chicago. I'll see you there in a week. Alan? Are we going?

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Alan, totally mystified by the big hurry, puts on his coat and heads to the door. Kari is holding the door open and impatiently is ready to go.

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alan

Bye guys. Safe trip.

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Turning to the other women there

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alan (CONT'D)

Very nice to meet you too!

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Alan and Kari get into Alan's car.

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alan (CONT'D)

Well that was fun. And you're pretty cool. So where am I taking you?

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Kari looking in the vanity mirror adjusting her make up.

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kari

I'm in Old City. Near the river.

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alan

Great that's right on the way.

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kari

Yep.

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alan

Yep what?

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Kari shooting a "are you really that slow look" at Alan. She goes back to the mirror.

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kari

Yep its right on the way.

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Alan again mystified just looks at Kari somewhat awe struck.

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Alan starts the car, but before putting it into gear, he turns back to Kari who is just finishing with the mirror.

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alan

You know I kinda like you. I mean I can't believe you just happened to be there tonight and we met. I'm really happy. Kind of serendipity you know.

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kari

Alan what are you talking about?

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alan

I mean I'm really glad we happened to meet.

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kari

Alan I knew you were coming. I asked Sherry to invite you over. It was the last time I was going to have a chance to meet you before they left.

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Alan, almost falling out of his seat

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alan

You knew? But....

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kari

Of course I knew. I've wanted to meet you for a while. Tonight was the last chance before they left. C'mon, I'm at 3rd and Fisher. There's more Jamison there.

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With that Kari plants a big kiss right on Alan's lips.

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kari (CONT'D)

Let's go.

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Alan deadpans right into the camera. Smiles and the camera pulls to the exterior of the car as it pulls off into the night. We see tail lights.

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fade to black

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